Build A Story With Bryan #1 – The Story So Far

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Hey, we’re off to a great start! Thank you to everyone who has contributed so far. Let’s keep it going. Here’s the story as of this morning. I’ve added the very last sentence.

For those who knew her, or thought they knew her, the sight of Brenda Duplicki sampling face creams at the beauty shop on Dexter two days after her death came as something of a surprise. More to the point, the Victorian frock she wore was unsettling, for age had muted its ebony folds to a dusty gray and the high white-lace color to a pestilent ocher. Suddenly, the crowd of onlookers was distracted by a high-pitched scream coming from the back of the shop.

Brenda ran out of the front door and disappeared in the crowd. But she accidentally left her purse on the beauty shop’s counter. Tossed from it, a sprawl of Turkish gold coins, an asthma inhaler and a shark’s tooth capped in silver. A passer-by, Hanley Spurl by name, idly studied the items on the counter top before his jaw dropped in astonishment. The silver-capped shark tooth was the last item the private investigator needed to find to confirm Brenda’s true identity as the notorious antiquities thief, Suzanne Zhuravlyova.

 But was this the original silver-capped shark tooth or just another imposter, inconspicuously placed in the path of Hanley Spurl that would lead him on another anonymously concocted chase lasting 7.23 years? He removed the riding gloves he’d worn every day since losing the horse 6.76 years ago, and performed a pinching test on the shark tooth his mentor Sable Dakker had taught him back when they were working the aquarium murders together.

Okay, so where will you take the story next?

8 thoughts on “Build A Story With Bryan #1 – The Story So Far

  1. Tricia

    The pinch test proved it to be the original; he took a puff from the asthma inhaler, and knew what he needed to do next.

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  2. JNapoli

    He had to find the woman he suspected was Suzanne Zhuravlyova and find out who she had given their child to all those years ago.

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  3. Scott Ritchie

    With a furtive glance in each direction, he scooped the contents back into the purse, tucked the whole affair next to the .45 in his jacket and slapped the gloves against his leg. He had only one hour to get back to Applebee’s.

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  4. Mindi

    He paused, stricken by memories of their doomed relationship and the heartbreak he still felt.

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  5. Scott Ritchie

    Or was it the lasagna? That was it. Hanley Spurl’s life long battle with lasagna was to blame. His eyes curled shut as did his fist to his chest.

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  6. HeidiLouWho

    He didn’t see the danger approaching him because his eyes were firmly closed as he experienced a lasagne-induced agony.

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  7. Tricia

    There she was… Suzanne Zhuravlyova. Nobody but Hanley knew it was her because she changed yet again. This time she wore stirrup pants, a They Might Be Giants oversized T-shirt, and a cute stylish hat that complimented her eyes. And it was those eyes that said it all.

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  8. Scott Ritchie

    Hanley sensed her and spun, the gat already in his hand. He aimed it square between those hazel orbs and let the lead fly. It took her head into the next room for a chat and sent the other half of her crashing to the floor. But wait. Though the shark tooth was real, this Zhuravylova was another fake, the third he’d dispatched since noon.

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